Would anyone be able to critique my writing?

Hi thanks for looking!
I'm fairly new to writing, but I really enjoy it! Just wondering if anyone could possibly read the following passage and give me some pointers to make it better! It would be very much appreciated! Thank you guys!
The rustling of leaves echoed through my ears and piercing hues of green came rushing through my pupils. I sat on my own, looking out through the clarity of the glass at the garden. The trees swayed in front of the bright blue backdrop, whilst the clouds…
Would anyone be able to critique my writing?

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